Sunday, 3 March 2013

Characters and Script Draft (Update week 10)


Characters

We have three main characters at the moment, The father character who the player is controlling through the story, his daughter who he will be searching for and his deceased wife who will only be referenced.

Father Character (Players perspective)

Name
(Caspian, Juan, Malik) Bailey

Personality
normally quite quiet, introvert, jokey, quick tempered, not physical

Occupation
Technical scientist? Doctor? , skilled

Social status
Semi-Upper class, Not stuck up but rich enough to live in a big house


Daughter character
Nishe? Namira 

Personality
Strong willed, brave, naive, intelligent, emotional.

Occupation
Was a student

Social status
Makes friends easily, looked after, a bit spoiled


The wife/mother
Shayla shemala, rhena, Tanith

Strong willed, Innocent, kind



The Catastrophe

After mother stood up for daughter (falling in love with the wrong person?), they were both target for dishonoring her family. Father was able to save his daughter and run away but not mother.

Year or so later the daughter goes missing, father fears a resentful family has caught up with her. Until he receives a message from her Asking for help.

He rushes off to find her, hoping he is not too late...


Info notes (in no order) :

What the player knows at the start:
Characters daughter has ran off at some point
Daughter is in danger
She needs to be rescued.

What the character knows at the start:
His wife was killed by her brother and father almost 2 years ago.
They ran away to live elsewhere, hiding from the family’s honor.
Has an idea where is daughter went too.
His daughter is very sad, misses her mum

What is revealed over the game:
Daughter went seeking revenge of her mothers killers
Why the mother died(moving away from the honor culture)
The characters regrets of failure or inaction.


The call to action

this will be the message the player hears at the very start setting them off into the game.

Daughters opening voice message

[This version is quite vague, going for a sympathetic intriguing approach.]

“ Dear Papa, I am sorry for the worry I must have given you.
There are just these feelings I could not shake off.
Things I felt I had to do, things … I know you wouldn’t approve of.
But … Im out on my own here now … im scared
I have resisted sending you this , ... this cry for help.
I guess I don’t think I really deserve saving
But I need you now…
Soon they will find me, I pray that you will come
Search your heart papa
You know where to find me.”


V2
[this version is a bit clearer as to what she has done, much more emotional message]

“Dear Papa, I am sorry to have left you this way
… I had to leave
They did not find me, I found them
For mother I …
I had to … I had to, to
I… I killed him, Papa

I know you would not approve … but that’s not why im sending you this now
Im in over my head Papa …
I need your help.”

story delivery 

This next section will be sections of script that the player will hear has he goes through the world, there is a sense of order here but it is not strict.


Protagonist’s thoughts


From the distress in her voice it is not difficult to guess where she has gone.

Our house gleam’s white upon the hill in the mid day sun.

Whatever her intentions here, it will be a familiar beacon for her … and for me.


I am surprised the house did not fall with my honor

No matter my intentions I failed my duty

yet there it's wood and mortar stands

You were my conviction too, I am so sorry Tanith


We left this place almost 2 years ago now... so little changes here

This cycle of window ledge judgement

swiping down any attempt to grow

oh Nisha what are you doing here....


A contradiction is written all over this town

the world moves on , all around them

and still they sit here

silencing themselves...


Even now, this very day

you all run off to celebrate your own perdition

Who would dare not been seen...


I remember your tears that day

when I told you life could not be that way

but how could you know the danger of your love

I see now how brave your mother was


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Notes:

I would like to get more progression in his character, showing and change in his view of his previous belief system, but i am finding that is more difficult to do.


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